高考英语读续写备考：中心两条拓展线
读续写首先求考生阅读篇约350词完整事然该材料容段落开头语进行续写（150词左右）发展成篇情节结构完整短文
事通设计情节障碍推动事高潮产生加场景描写烘托物心理细致描写整事够条理清晰逻辑性强展现读者眼前题性较强事结尾处加点睛笔
写作思路：中心两条拓展线
中心指事中心词中心句文章旨两条拓展线指事情节线情感线
注意：
1 学生拓展事时偏离中心
2 违背作者观点感情色彩
3 细节性描述太话
面2016年10月浙江卷例学起学写事续写
阅读面材料根容段落开头语续写两段构成篇完整短文续写词数应150左右
One weekend in July Jane and her husband Tom had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest Unfortunately on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel By the time they reached the lake Jane was so angry that she said to TomI’m going to find a better spot for us to camp and walked away
With no path to follow Jane just walked on for quite a long time After she had climbed to a high place she turned around hoping to see the lake To her surprise she saw nothing but forest and far beyond a snow capped mountain top She suddenly realized that she was lost
Tomshe criedHelp
No reply If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom Jane kept moving but the farther she walked the more confused she became As night was beginning to fall Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night Lying awake in the dark Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him
Jane rose at the break of day hungry and thirsty She could hear water trickling（滴落）somewhere at a distance Quickly she followed the sound to a stream To her great joy she also saw some berry bushes She drank and ate a few berries Never in her life had she tasted anything better Feeling stronger now Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake
As she picked her way carefully along the stream Jane heard a helicopter Is that for me？ Unfortunately the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above A few minutes later another helicopter flew overhead Jane took off her yellow blouse thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again
Paragraph 1
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again_______________________
Paragraph 2
It was daybreak when Jane woke up____________________
理清事线索
通阅读围绕lifelove中心文段进行情节线情感线梳理
六素：
情节线：quarreled→walked away→got lost→found the stream→helicopter yellow blouse open area yellow blouse
情感线：angry（surprise）（confusedregretful）（feeling stronger）（hopeful）
已首句
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again
It was daybreak when Jane woke up
二搭建续写框架
般说事容Jane林中历曲折终Tom相见两宜形成完整事环突出夫妻间理性沟通重性题
根文出现helicopter续写第段开头出现转折but根第二段开头daybreak Jane woke up知第段里Jane 困野外然没获救it was getting dark again 环境烘托独外会发生什事情呢？心情会受什影响呢？
第二段开头daybreak里情节会什转机呢？会飞机？获救？获救情绪会什变化呢？
面整理续写容框架
篇文章续写框架建构程中夫妻俩终团圆前提进行构思设计Jane获救前设计两波折事件者险境：没飞机发现前Jane会遇什呢？会想起什呢？会悔丈夫Tom 前争吵赌气？合理情节创设程中生动动作细节描写助环境描写烘托加穿插深刻物心理描述物跌宕起伏情节中描述栩栩生加文生活点题
三参考范文
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again Soon an absolute darkness ruled the forest（环境烘托衔接文）Jane tired and scared lay down near a stone missing her family at a distance（环境产生心理影响）All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn’t help cryingHadn’t I quarreled with Tom walked away and climbed to the high place I wouldn’t be trapped in this awful place confronted with the danger of dying（详心理独白描写）She regretted with endless anxiety and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes（with 复合结构物心理刻画入木三分）
It was daybreak when Jane woke up And as luck would have it a helicopter just came by（转折点）Jane yelled and skipped waving her yellow blouse（动作位描述更体现时物心情）To her great joy the helicopter noticed her and landed What astonished her most was that it was Tom who sat in the helicopterOut rushed Tom A huge smile spread across Jane’s face and the couple hugged tightly for a long time（情感动词倒装句副词物兴奋激动心情跃纸）It was the narrow escape that made Jane realize that love was priceless（强调句）Over the next years a change came over the couple Reasoned discussion replaced fierce arguments and politeness replaced contradiction They treasured their life and love more（点题）
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读续写首先求考生阅读篇约350词完整事然该材料容段落开头语进行续写（150词左右）发展成篇情节结构完整短文
事通设计情节障碍推动事高潮产生加场景描写烘托物心理细致描写整事够条理清晰逻辑性强展现读者眼前题性较强事结尾处加点睛笔
写作思路：中心两条拓展线
中心指事中心词中心句文章旨两条拓展线指事情节线情感线
注意：
1 学生拓展事时偏离中心
2 违背作者观点感情色彩
3 细节性描述太话
面2016年10月浙江卷例学起学写事续写
阅读面材料根容段落开头语续写两段构成篇完整短文续写词数应150左右
One weekend in July Jane and her husband Tom had driven three hours to camp overnight by a lake in the forest Unfortunately on the way an unpleasant subject came up and they started to quarrel By the time they reached the lake Jane was so angry that she said to TomI’m going to find a better spot for us to camp and walked away
With no path to follow Jane just walked on for quite a long time After she had climbed to a high place she turned around hoping to see the lake To her surprise she saw nothing but forest and far beyond a snow capped mountain top She suddenly realized that she was lost
Tomshe criedHelp
No reply If only she had not left her mobile phone in that bag with Tom Jane kept moving but the farther she walked the more confused she became As night was beginning to fall Jane was so tired that she had to stop for the night Lying awake in the dark Jane wanted very much to be with Tom and her family She wanted to hold him and tell him how much she loved him
Jane rose at the break of day hungry and thirsty She could hear water trickling（滴落）somewhere at a distance Quickly she followed the sound to a stream To her great joy she also saw some berry bushes She drank and ate a few berries Never in her life had she tasted anything better Feeling stronger now Jane began to walk along the stream and hope it would lead her to the lake
As she picked her way carefully along the stream Jane heard a helicopter Is that for me？ Unfortunately the trees made it impossible for people to see her from above A few minutes later another helicopter flew overhead Jane took off her yellow blouse thinking that she should go to an open area and flag them if they came back again
Paragraph 1
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again_______________________
Paragraph 2
It was daybreak when Jane woke up____________________
理清事线索
通阅读围绕lifelove中心文段进行情节线情感线梳理
六素：
情节线：quarreled→walked away→got lost→found the stream→helicopter yellow blouse open area yellow blouse
情感线：angry（surprise）（confusedregretful）（feeling stronger）（hopeful）
已首句
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again
It was daybreak when Jane woke up
二搭建续写框架
般说事容Jane林中历曲折终Tom相见两宜形成完整事环突出夫妻间理性沟通重性题
根文出现helicopter续写第段开头出现转折but根第二段开头daybreak Jane woke up知第段里Jane 困野外然没获救it was getting dark again 环境烘托独外会发生什事情呢？心情会受什影响呢？
第二段开头daybreak里情节会什转机呢？会飞机？获救？获救情绪会什变化呢？
面整理续写容框架
篇文章续写框架建构程中夫妻俩终团圆前提进行构思设计Jane获救前设计两波折事件者险境：没飞机发现前Jane会遇什呢？会想起什呢？会悔丈夫Tom 前争吵赌气？合理情节创设程中生动动作细节描写助环境描写烘托加穿插深刻物心理描述物跌宕起伏情节中描述栩栩生加文生活点题
三参考范文
But no more helicopters came and it was getting dark again Soon an absolute darkness ruled the forest（环境烘托衔接文）Jane tired and scared lay down near a stone missing her family at a distance（环境产生心理影响）All the fantastic memory crowded in and she couldn’t help cryingHadn’t I quarreled with Tom walked away and climbed to the high place I wouldn’t be trapped in this awful place confronted with the danger of dying（详心理独白描写）She regretted with endless anxiety and then became asleep with shining tears in her eyes（with 复合结构物心理刻画入木三分）
It was daybreak when Jane woke up And as luck would have it a helicopter just came by（转折点）Jane yelled and skipped waving her yellow blouse（动作位描述更体现时物心情）To her great joy the helicopter noticed her and landed What astonished her most was that it was Tom who sat in the helicopterOut rushed Tom A huge smile spread across Jane’s face and the couple hugged tightly for a long time（情感动词倒装句副词物兴奋激动心情跃纸）It was the narrow escape that made Jane realize that love was priceless（强调句）Over the next years a change came over the couple Reasoned discussion replaced fierce arguments and politeness replaced contradiction They treasured their life and love more（点题）
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